Category: Writers Block
Infernal Declaration
Satan, thou art my Lord.
Satan, thou art my Master.
Satan, thou art my King.
For thee I fight. For thee I strive. For thee I do all that I am able.
My sovereign, my captain, I stand by thy side through all!
I am thine, Satan, my beloved Father. Though my soul is my own, I choose to let it be in thy keeping. Thou wilt teach me to make myself strong, to make myself as thou art.
Soon, let thy bright wings stretch o'er all, and let thy majesty cover the earth! May thy name be forever exalted!
A decent dark prayer; certainly a unique read for someone such as I. My only suggestions are
1: The first three lines are repetative. I see what you're doing there, but perhaps one of the three would suffice?
Also, you use o'er rather than over. Again I see why you've done this, but it seems out of place given the language you use throughout.
If you ever wanted to write some prose and post it heree, it would be interesting. I'd read it.
Well, I like it the way it is. Lol. I'm not gonna change it. And also, I believe that o'er is a correct usage; lots of poets and such use that; Colridge comes to mind.
You don't have to change it. It was just my oppinion. You did indeed use O'er correctly.